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Hi team,
Here's the update many of you have asked about. Building management is renovating the third floor, where our office is. The floor will be completely closed, with no access at all, so everyone will work from home for the duration of the renovation.
Key dates:
- Friday, March 7 (end of day): Please take home everything you'll need: personal items, laptops, chargers, monitors if you need them, and any important files. You won't be able to come back in for anything.
- Monday, March 10: Renovation starts and work from home begins.
- Friday, March 28: Expected finish (about three weeks), though it could run slightly longer.
Our weekly team meeting stays on Tuesdays at 10am, but it moves to Zoom instead of the conference room. I'll send the link separately.
I know this may be inconvenient, and I really appreciate your flexibility. If you have any questions or concerns, reach out to me directly and I'll do my best to help.
Thanks so much, everyone.
Dana
Edit notes
- Length: about 340 words → about 160 words (about 47% of original). Word counts are estimates.
- What I cut or merged:
- The throat-clearing opener ("I wanted to take a moment to reach out and touch base…").
- Filler phrases like "as you may or may not already be aware," "which is of course," and "during this period of time."
- The repeated warning about not being able to return to the office, now said once in the March 7 bullet.
- The two paragraphs about the closure and the work-from-home decision, merged into one short opening.
- What I protected:
- All dates: March 7, March 10 and March 28.
- The "about three weeks" estimate and the possibility it runs longer.
- The full take-home list and the third-floor closure.
- The Tuesday 10am Zoom meeting and the note that the link comes separately.
- Your thanks, the invitation to reach out, and the friendly tone and sign-off.
- Assumptions: I put the dates in bullets so phone readers can skim them, as your style notes allowed. I listed them in date order, so the March 7 deadline comes first.
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